Deep . Down
By its edge I sit, eyes in their earnest
looming over its seemingly unending surface.
Charmed am I by its clear shine, its fooling guise.
Shallow and smooth is the reflection lying in my eyes.
Yet beyond the bliss lies only the promise to malice.
So is this inner lake, my soul, twisted as
Brisk . Love
A slight breeze sways the curtains into a soothing
dance, just as the light start to sieve through
my shutters. And a third guest, slowly seeping
into the room, the mild warmth from the morning sun anew.
I welcome the moment of peace as I lie and stare
at the ceiling, on its blank surface seeing our night replay.
My heart jumps as you suddenly open the stark door
leaving it flaming red, feeling exposed and infatuated,
ambiguously so. Though my heart beat no more,
my rhyme went astray when you kissed me, closed your hand
around mine and walked down this path of love wit
Cold . Revelation
Stale is the air that fills my lungs so sweetly,
its clean cold reaching me, breaching me clear.
Under the stars, the night bereaves completely,
until no heart is clouded and truth becomes sincere.
Into the darkness I throw all this deceit,
leave all false emotions drown in their conceit.
The ring of silence is all I hear, broken only by
a rustle of leaves and the flow of my breathing.
I sit and watch the si
How grave and grievous a day can begin.
The black clouds reflecting a bare
sombreness, within our hearts silently borne.
So many a song tell of love forlorn.
Softly the wind sings of some we share,
a whiff of melancholy across our skin.
Musings on my mind, momentous ever so.
Tangling, trapping me in a train
of thought until I was lost in reflection.
Yet drawn out by
The air brims with the bright song of a bird,
bringing warmth to the cold that comes with dawn.
From every corner you can hear its word
and to the windowpane joyfully you are drawn.
Curtains open, allowing light to flutter through,
embrace you in their festive flight.
Until you suddenly find yourself in my limelight,
and turn to me smiling heartfelt and true.
For all life's hurt this was compensation,
but my heart was soon struck by realisation
It bitterly discovered all this was
An aw
Flashing by the train's window, the green trees
and scenery are all but mere pleasantries.
I am lost in the beat my heart started
playing, when it was you it regarded.
Your loving touch ignites in me vivid chemistry
in my joy or as I come clean of my heart's ache.
I felt attraction and admiration of a love of such artistry.
I'd never turn back time and these memories, forsake.
My writing is guided not by the motion of my hand,
but by this love of yours I cannot withstand
Seen in nature and man alike.
Warns of impeding danger, shows deepest ambitions.
Known by many, understood by less.
Day in night, we are covered in its shade, as we
are told goodbye by what we love.
And when day chases night, in the earliest
hours the sun warms our face to this colour.
If not the sun, those around take up the task.
And one, especially, makes sure
our heart does not lose its colour
or blacken in entirety.
Without its caring warmth,
it merely tells us of an end
to life, the perceived or a paper's poetry.
Caught between four brick-stoned walls
in an atmosphere resting, pushing on my shoulders.
I open the creaking door in hope of relief, release
and am welcomed by the sight of concrete,
the reek of a city, man's twisted perception
of beauty and luxury.
Hanging on the edge of the balcony
In all we find
It is the treasured table salt
with which we flavor our life to a fault
The net that will suffice
to quell this storm of butterflies
Grand in words and subtlety
and the motion a mime speaks fluently
It is as much the pen
as our heart is the paper
Like a coast bears the ocean from above,
so too bear I the tides of love
Tall as I may stand, still I lose
dearly, surrendering my heart without a ruse
What does freedom hand me,
as I am, captured by the emotion
dwelling inside those eyes so freely
Caught in the moment, my heart is set in motion
In the footsteps set in the sand I find
my path to you, in every step a memory once shared
As the tracks fade I look up to the kind
silhouette standing silently in th
Vow
Some years ago,
Atop the sunny hill
Looking out on the falling sun..
Enclosed by my arms, I made you a promise..
Whatever fate may cast upon us,
Wherever it may take us,
I will promise to protect you,
Through eternity's grasp
Mere chaos and confusion
cannot dwindle our beliefs
Descendants of the night,
will stumble over just feelings.
Looking in your eyes,
reason took its flight
The only thing left,
Genuine and true
Was my love for you
Embrace
I take a dive in history
Swim along and take a memory...
Let myself get carried on the wind´s melody..
Felt the soft touch of the grass..
Saw the vastness of the blue sky
When I heard a voice singing...
Down the path of moving water,
Reaching the blue lake
The lake with you on it's side
I walked towards you when I fell...
Fell into the sweet embrace of your arms...
Bliss
In the fields of black roses,
A red rose always blooms.
Among the black clouds in the sky,
A bright yellow star always shines through.
See the breeze gently play with your locks,
With the sun rekindling your warm smile..
See you gracefully dance on the wind´s melody
With a beauty words cannot grasp..
A mere look in your captivating eyes,
Enough to find myself embraced by..
Pure bliss..
Grasping Love
In the words of your whisper,
I can feel your heart speak loudly..
In the shout of silent longings,
I can feel your spirit's song hum softly..
In the reflection of your eyes,
I can see your kindness glimmer through..
In the pleasure of your smile,
I can liven up in every inch of my body..
They stand out, even in the darkest of night,
In the pitch black darkness, I can see you kindle.
I enter the warmth getting to me.
I surrender to your loving embrace,
I smoothly fall into your love,
If this is a dream, do not wake me...
Quia ita vita est
Cur vitam megare,
cum mors ita prope est?
Cur arma delere,
cum bellum inevitable est?
Cur sibi amicos facere,
cum scis te eos amisurum esse?
Cur deos adorare,
cum scis eos nou esse?
Quia ita vita est...
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The original has a Dutch translation, so I'll translate the piece into English, I think it'll be easier to understand that way =P
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Why deny life,
when death is near?
Why destroy weapons,
when war is inevitable?
Why make friends,
when y
Be
Will it ever, will it never, be, forever?
Are we meant to be together?
Or will it be thrown into the sky
like a feather.
On the winds, into the blue,
above the clouds.
Only to fall, shattered, broken
or..
Only to fly, graceful, perfect.
What would fate let it be?
What would they let it be?
What would ...you let it be?
Though that knowledge may strike, fear.
Never will I doubt, one simple, single thing,
In every way is my love to be yours.
Colourful
Across a field of green, waiting
In the depths of blue, I await..
Blinded by yellow, thinking
Left by the orange, I think of..
Beneath the black and white, dreaming
Left alone by the red, I dream of..
You..
Let the sun warm our hearts,
with its golden rays.
Let the wind cleanse our souls,
with its swiping chill.
Let the sea calm our spirits,
with its roiling waves.
Let the moon guard our bodies,
with its celestial body.
Let us bring nature onto our doorstep
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A Guide to Positive Critiques
A Positive Critique:
• Does not solely concentrate on a poem's weak points, but tempers constructive criticism with acknowledgment of the good features.
• Is not made up of comments like "well done" or emoticons, as they do not explain why the poem is well written. Comments and emoticons belong in the introduction and summary only.
• A knowledge of technical poetic terms is desirable, but not necessary, to be able to provide constructive criticism.
• Try to keep your thoughts focused on the poem and how it affects you as the reader.
• Explain why you liked or disliked the poem; don't just state the emotion it triggered.
•
Poetry is the work of a poet; he is a craftsman like any other. The notion that anybody can be a poet is ridiculous. It's the same as saying anybody can be a mason: it takes rigorous devotion and effort. Anybody can be inspired, but not anybody can write a functioning poem-- that is a, a work of rhythmic literature that uses figurative language to convey something. That "something" is what makes poetry so difficult. A poem taps into some aspect of the plethora of human emotion, making poetry universal regardless of time or place; that is, even if a reader can't identify with the situation or time period of the poet, the underlying sentiment w
Remnants Of Another Time
Do you remember
Those first few days?
We were so nervous back then,
But we managed as best we could.
I'd take your hand,
And walk you to class.
We'd talk while we could
And I'd steal a kiss before the bell rang.
Do you remember
How we used to sit on the hood of your car
And stare up at the sky?
There was so much we wanted to see and do.
So many possibilities.
So many paths to take.
Why can't we walk there together?
As we said we would?
As we promised that rainy day,
When we were under my umbrella,
And you pushed away.
I'll never forget how wonderfully you danced.
You called for me to join you,
I
Vicarious intent on a Black Monday,
lifted up and let loose
Feelings that strain and ease someday
Unholy premonitions murdered me
Love lost in the rain that day
A happy ending, I could never see
In the presence of this struggle,
strength grew unknown and unresolved
Light and Dark in their endless juggle
Your words invading my private moments
Let loose on the world, breaking me
Breaking me into partial movements
Falling to the floor, great tears drown me
Hands and knees bloody, now I see
Pain flowing effortlessly
Pools of this enhancing my pain soaked vision
Cries into the dark are unanswered
Clockwork of my empathy; a brutal
I'm not a perfect person.
Even though I like to think I am.
I've made many mistakes.
And there are many things I do regret.
So many things I wish to forget.
But they make me who I am.
And they helped me grown into this man.
This is the reason why,
That I can run and even fly,
When I want to crawl
Or feel that I will fall
I stand and live this life.
The mistakes I have made so far.
Have forged the man from the very start.
And so I'm not a perfect person.
And though I never meant to hurt you,
And I wish I could take it back,
I can only learn and grow in this too.
I learn and live my life,
One small step at a time,
Sometimes
My Mother's voice still lingers now in languid pools of memory.
With the sweet tones that she sang to us, she soothed our minds with melody
I've looked upon the words she sang and some are harsh when on a page;
but when she sang them from her lips, her songs seemed perfect for our age.
I was that small and Mucky kid, my father was so oft away
No Fishy wished I on my dish, but still she sung it anyway
When came the time my love sung too, to aid our little one to sleep
With night night stories and the songs, she sent her off to dreams so sweet.
For all who read my poem here, think on your Mother's voice as well
Remember songs that cal
You never realized, but i did
you always tried to squelch my excitment
i could never take pride in what i pride in.
i never understood until lately
why you act as if you hate me
and you why you do it so fakely
not another like me will you find
so go ahead try and leave me behind
but when you do i wont be far from your mind.
cause i am The one you cant forget
as your heart and mind regret
your sailing ship, that you set.
i've already done my crying.
ive heard your "truth" told lyings
inside im sure i was dying
though all that matters to you
is whats on the outside view
you couldnt care about the "who"
Just the "what"
The breaking of dawn would not stand alone
today, for in her it came to break
She felt cold to the touch, melancholy
striking at surrounding air relentlessly
Caught with eyes filled of surpressed ache
a gaze subtly withering the horizon that shone
Yet seen beyond the horizon was a shimmer
of light, never shall it grow any dimmer
Round and about your rampaged soul, I will
trespass, driven by a diligent endeavour
Until you have succumbed to the freeing chill
Smoothly driven out of the dark, it will sever
Clean up that blurred sight, and see how life was
Feel
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NEWS:
Real busy with all sorts of things but nevertheless I managed to write another poem. (nights continue to be perfect for writing) Hope you like it.
And I'm trying to find the time to e
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